Personal Essay Revising Goals
Goal #1: Make it so the reader can feel what I was feeling in the scene.- I'll do this by adding more descriptions and laying out the scene more clearly.
Goal #2: Make sure it does not become repetitive. - Although the paper is about one belief I want to make sure I don't repeat myself too much and bore the reader. I'll do this by using a variety of strategies instead of just stories or just quotes.
Goal #3: Make sure it can relate to everyone, not just me.
- I know this paper is about what I believe and why I believe it, but I want to use evidence from other people's lives so that it can relate to a wide variety of readers.
i think that these are very attainable goals and that it will help your essay more interesting
ReplyDeleteGoal three I feel is definately important. You want the reader to make the personal connection to your essay.
ReplyDeleteGood goals. More detail and description would be good, the problem is there is a 500 word limit so it can't get much longer. Relating it too others will add to its affect on the reader. Try to find a common experience that many people would share. Anywho, It's up the hizzle. (I'm pretty sure that is a good thing)
ReplyDeleteNumber 2 is something i need to work on as well. I just re read it and put different words in and stuff like that
ReplyDeletePeople HATE repetition in writing pieces. I think you're making a good decision by trying to stop it from repeating itself. Good call, Boss.
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